Blog Assignment 10

The very first choice I made in revising my rough draft was to add more personal voice. I got lost in all the facts about pesticides and the history so much that I began to forget why this subject ever interested me in the first place.I began reading the book Silent Spring which I had read many articles about. I found that Rachel Carson focused more on the issues that I find concerning and it really helped me to start righting with passion and feeling instead of quoting some scholarly resources which I found hard to comprehend and relate to. Once I found quotes which inspired me, I began focusing on expanding more on quotes. The group conference helped me realize that I really needed to expan more on my quote about technique and why I chose to include that in my paper. It also helped me realize of ways I could tie in previous writings to help enhance my paper. After the group conferences I felt more free to to expand on other ideas and I realized that although the paper is suppose to be very engaged on one part of technology, It is still okay to include other examples. Basically, I just felt more free in my writing which makes it alot easier for me to write. I dont like restrictions and I think that was my main problem I encountered when I first began writing. The conferences made me realize that we really have many options for how we approach our topic and that we should really engage the other texts and find ways that Nye, Vonnegut, and the other authors which we read had a voice in our topics. I personally just always get more out of a conversation when it's face to face. Therefore I really liked the face to face conversations and found it easier to communicate ideas. I think many of us found that when we were explaning our goal of our paper, we ended up saying it better than we did in our paper.